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 hydrophobic by brendan

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PostSubject: hydrophobic by brendan   Fri Sep 05, 2008 8:15 pm

hydrophobic

you fear me
sitting there starring silently at me
but is it me you fear
or is it my content
the unknown unchangable creature that lay live and breath me

you hat me
you who willing throws rocks at my being
you who waste the taste of food by dumping it in me

I’m kind
I do not bite
I might stir when you try to embrace me
But I learn to hug hold and heal to you form
We merge together
As one

You try to kick me
But you’re on my land now
I stir up the watery waves
And in a minute yougo down beneath me
You stuggle to get back up
But I hold you down

When you’re gone they find your body
But not you
But even though I say “I did it”
No one blames me
For I am water
Fear me love me.


hi ina it's me yes me brendan
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PostSubject: Re: hydrophobic by brendan   Tue Oct 14, 2008 5:58 pm

Not awful. A bit repetitive without need. Otherwise, as I mentioned in person - great.

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